Today is our topic of discussion Writing a description elaborate
Writing a description elaborate
Look at this picture and try to think about these questions and then write answers to them.
Fig : A tea garden
1. What is the woman doing? (pluck)
2. In which district or districts can you find this scene?
3. What will she do with the leaves when her basket is filled up? (deliver to the factory or to the vehicle used for carrying them to the factory)
4. How do we get made or manufactured tea out of these leaves? (leaves prepared in the factory….)
Read the following description of tea manufacture.
(1) Fresh tea shoots are plucked from a garden. Each shoot usually has two leaves and a bud.
(2) These leaves are then taken to the factory for manufacture. There in the factory these leaves are treated in various methods and style.
(3) The leaves are first made to pass through a process called withering. As a result of a 12-18 hour-withering, loss of moisture and some chemical changes take place in the leaves.
(4) The next stage in the tea manufacture is distortion of the withered tea leaves, known as processing. The leaves are loaded into a rolling machine where they are ruptured, crushed, torn and curled. It is here where the tea gets flavour, colour and aroma.
(5) Immediately after the leaves are crushed and bruised, fermentation begins. In this process, through a series of chemical reactions, green colour turns into coppery black.
(6) The well-fermented leaves then are passed through the dryer for drying. During drying more than half the weight of the withered leaves is evaporated. Drying is required to make the leaves suitable for storage and transportation.
(7) The last stage in the tea manufacture is sorting. After the leaves are dried, they are quickly cooled off. Then the tea particles of different sizes are separated through a mechanically operated sieve with meshes of varying sizes. As the leaves are sorted. They are packed according to a number of grades.
Read each of the paragraphs in B above in which an action or a sequence of actions has been described. Notice how a bold-printed word in a paragraph helps to express the sequence of actions within the paragraph or between two paragraphs. These words are: first, next, after, then, as a result, last, etc.
Since they connect one action or idea with the other or since they indicate the sequential progression of actions/ideas, they are called connectives. Now write how these connectives are linking two or more activities in the whole text.
Example
The word then in the second para shows how the action of plucking tea shoots (para 1) leads to the action of taking these shoots to the factory for manufacture (para 2).
Activity: Describe the process of making sugar from the sugarcane.
Clues:
Farmers grow sugarcane-ripe sugarcane stalks sold to the sugar mills- stalks are shredded (cut) soft pith (spongy substance) is put into crushers juice is extracted-boiled-decolourised (made colourless) -crystallised (made into crystals)-packed-marketed
Use different paragraphs for different activities, showing the use of connectives in describing the whole process. Some other connectives are: but, so, therefore, though, consequently, this, that, however, etc.
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